09英教2班 陈钦 1
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The benefits of volunteering
Today, more and more people in the world take part in volunteering. It’s very meaningful and wonderful. In my opinion, we can gain a lot from the activity.
First, we can help others who are in trouble. We can interact and understand better with each other. The smiles of the people can make us feel happy and encourage us in return. Second, we can have a better understanding of the world, for example, the earth, animals, environment and so on. A lot of knowledge can be gained in our mind. Third, during volunteering, we can acquire much experience. We can open our heart when communicating with others. We can handle the difficulties better and more effective.
Of course, we can gain a lot more besides the benefits mentioned above. On the other hand, it also can bring benefits to others. So, let’s go to be a volunteer.
点评：本文条理比较清楚，观点明确，论述遵循总—分—总结构。不足之处是句与句之间的衔接不是很紧密，另外要注意遣词造句，有少量语法错误，应该尽量避免。
点评者：09英教1班黄晓敏
